THE LOSER PLAN During the years of suffering, a super hero called Maze was facing the war of the Americans. One day he was planning a vacation, that was going to be amazing; when a big giant octopus attacked the whole city… He had no choice but to stop his vacation, and to stop the octopus. He was transforming into a big octopus, and ready to battle Maze. Maze was ready; he got his sword and shield ready for battle. When he came, everybody cheered for him; the octopus was not very happy… He used his legs and arms and kicked Maze right up into the air. Maze said to the people; I have a plan, but I’ll need you guys to help me with it; everybody agreed to help Maze, and so they all gathered around to listen to Maze’s plan. He said to the people, I need a person, to help and pull a string; that way, when the giant octopus reached me, you guys just pull the string, and it will trip; then I will need a guy that is good at tying knots, that is when the giant octopus trips, that guy will tie his up and give it to me; then rest of the problems I will deal with it… Everybody agreed to his magnificent plan, and so they got to work. First Maze went to get a very long string, and gave it to two people that were very good at strength to pull it, instead of pulling it let us make it that Maze’s plan was not at length that good, for the octopus knew all about his plan; and so could very easily pass the test… When they failed, Maze thought about this problem; they all knew that the octopus it always listening to their plans. Now what? Well since Maze could tell the other people his plan, he had decided to show them his plan. He drew it on a piece of white paper, and showed it to the people, he made some moves of how it was done; they all understood, but the giant octopus didn’t. His plan was the same, but the giant octopus didn’t know it. He decided to be careful, but he couldn’t, because the string was invisible; instead of the string part, Maze changed it into plastic paper; that way the giant octopus couldn’t see what they were up to; this plan was good, but let us see how it ends. Then two men were pulling the plastic, the plastic paper broke; and so maybe Maze didn’t think it all the way through. He changed a magnificent plan: First of all, some people distract the giant octopus; and then Maze tied his legs and arms; and threw him into the ocean, where he was gone and 100 percent drowned with his legs and arms tied behind his back. And so Maze saved the day once again, and when his mom and dad returned home; they were very proud of him. But maze was still sad, his mom and dad asked; What is the matter Maze? Well, I did save the day Hooray! But I still didn’t get a chance of relaxing like little children, they were like holidays! then his mother and father decided to hold him a holiday celebration, and lived happily ever after. The octopus did return, and it was all to his mom the scientist. Maze did defeat him again and again; until the octopus was tired, he knew that he was not the guy to beat Maze, so he changed his mind and left the city and gave lived to Maze’s fans in peace. The end…
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THE LOSER PLAN During the years of suffering, a super hero called Maze was facing the war of the Americans. One day he was planning a vacation, that was going to be amazing; when a big giant octopus attacked the whole city… He had no choice but to stop his vacation, and to stop the octopus. He was transforming into a big octopus, and ready to battle. Maze was ready; he got his sword and shield ready for battle. When he came, everybody cheered for him; the octopus was not very happy… The octopus used his legs and arms and kicked Maze right up into the air. Maze said to the people; I have a plan, but I’ll need you guys to help me with it; everybody agreed to help Maze, and so they all gathered around to listen to Maze’s plan. He said to the people, I need a person, to help and pull a string; that way, when the giant octopus reached me, you guys just pull the string, and it will trip; then I will need a guy that is good at tying knots, that is when the giant octopus move, that guy will tie his up and give it to me; then rest of the problems I will deal with it… Everybody agreed to his magnificent plan, and so they got to work. First Maze went to get a very long string, and gave it to two people that were very good at pulling it, instead of pulling it let us make it that Maze’s plan was not at length that good, for the octopus knew all about his plan; and so he could very easily pass the test… When they failed, Maze thought about this problem; they all knew that the octopus it always listening to their plans. Now what? Well since Maze could tell the other people his plan, he had decided to show them his plan. He drew it on a piece of white paper, and showed it to the people, he made some moves of how it was done; they all understood, but the giant octopus didn’t. His plan was the same, but the giant octopus didn’t know it. He decided to be careful, but he couldn’t, because the string was invisible; instead of the string part, Maze changed it into plastic paper; that way the giant octopus couldn’t see what they were up to; this plan was good, but let us sees how it ends. Then two men were pulling the plastic, the plastic paper broke; and so maybe Maze didn’t think it all the way through. He changed a magnificent plan: First of all, some people distract the giant octopus; and then Maze tied his legs and arms; and threw him into the ocean, where he was gone and 100 percent drowned with his legs and arms tied behind his back. And so Maze saved the day once again, and when his mom and dad returned home; they were very proud of him. But maze was still sad, his mom and dad asked; What is the matter Maze? Well, I did save the day Hooray! But I still didn’t get a chance of relaxing like little children, they like holidays! then his mother and father decided to hold him a holiday celebration, and lived happily ever after. The octopus did return, and it was all to his mom the scientist. Maze did defeat him again and again; until the octopus was tired, he knew that he was not the guy to beat Maze, so he changed his mind and left the city and left Maze’s fans in peace. The end… 四年级:欧阳雨鹭